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Title: Help, please
Post by: GenocideGtarist on January 10, 2005, 08:46:39 PM

Hey, nobody ever goes to the Storyboards...right? well if anybody does happen to stop by there, check out my story...it's in the thread called "Yet another Mario Fanfic...Very Long". if anybody does read it...can i have some feed back, please? i'm incredibly self consious bout my writing and what others think, sry

Title: Re: Help, please
Post by: mariluigi3 on January 12, 2005, 09:09:54 PM

umm... why is your topic's title "help, please"?

Title: Re: Help, please
Post by: Suffix on January 12, 2005, 09:28:43 PM

Heheh. You think your story is long? Check out The Astute Duo, in the same section.

As for your story, it's somewhat interesting, but it doesn't exactly flow. The descriptions seem to start and stop in a monotonous manner.

EDIT: Well... I must say, it is pretty good. But I still stand by the description difficulty. Other than that, it is good.

Maybe I should write fanfic... Nobody read the Astute Duo.

Edited by - Suffix on 1/12/2005 7:57:37 PM