"You concentrate on what the characters say.
"Hm...Do you think that perhaps you could add some detail? I mean, like how they're moving, their expressions, the sceneray, etc.? "
--Keep on reading. You'll see what I mean... It'll get REALLY intense and descriptive in the later chapters of those I've posted...
Actually Part 1 mostly focuses on events, while Part 2 focuses on the implications...the trauma, emotions, suffering... As for Part 3 and 4...well...let's just wait and see what happens. ;P
Oh, and keep in mind that this story was written a year and a half ago (and was in play-like format). Most of Part 1 was edited and revised (into novel form) a year ago. The later Chapters in Part 1 were
revised only recently, and since that year ago, my writing style has improved. I believe Part 2 will be the most well written. ;)
Anyway, thanks for reading it, everybody! And, like I said, I like having feedback, whether good or bad. That way I know what I'm doing right and what needs improvement. ;)
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Deep inside us all is a little green elf telling us to burn things.
Edited by - Sapphira on 8/11/2003 1:24:29 PM
