Wow, the past, like, 4 pages haven't had a single Chapter in them...How sad...
Well, whatever. OK, here's what I thinks o far- it's gotten a LOT better, I love all the emotional stuff, but..I dunno...
I mean, FOUR YEARS, and the Mario Bros. don't get a **** thing accomplished? I mean...Come on! Ahem. Well, whatever, it's still fairly good. Sounds more like a soap opera now, but...*glances around nervously* Despite the fact I hate soap operas, I LOVE soap-opera-ish fanfiction, in many cases.
Anyway...Hey, since a couple of other people did it...I'm gonna give you a smaple of my work, allright? Hm...But...? What TYPE of section should it BE? One about the Yoshies...? How about Mario...? Or the Koopalings? Or Kamek? What about teh League of Smashers...?! Gah! Action, drama, romance...?! I DON'T KNOW HOW TO CHOOSE!!
REGAIN YOUR POSTURE, YOU BUFFOON!!!
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OK, I'm better.
Yay! I found a section that's perfect! Take a peek. (It's from Chapter 22, but...The Chapters aren't increcibly long, so...)
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After about another minute or so, the door flew open, and Iggy felt a playful arm yank him in. he promptly yelped out in surprise as he tumbled to the carpeted floor of Wendy's bedroom.
Wendy was spoiled, many might say, but her brothers begged to differ. Wendy USED to be spoiled. When she was younger, she was RUTHLESS. But then things changed, after her mother left home, and Wendy developed into a much more kind-hearted kid.
She had her own room because she was the only girl, of course. Not only did it have a wood door, but it also had a soft, navy blue floor of carpet, with various pictures of this and that on her walls. Of course, the boys had these, too, just not of the same taste. While Wendy preferred photos of family get-togethers and old friends long gone, Morton and Roy had pictures of deformed skulls and rock bands, while Lemmy and Larry had various posters of female pop artists like Cindy Lynn the sky blue Yoshi, lead vocalist of the 'LavaLava Lamps' or Ally Bean the Fungiade, guitarist of 'The Mistake'.
A marvelously crafted oak dresser, painted white with curved edges and gold handle rested dead ahead. On the right was Wendy's bed, which was about twice her height in length. It had silk curtains surrounding it which created a classic 'Princess' type of look. The room was dimly lit at the time by a chandelier which hung from the ceiling, made of glowing yellow rocks which were strung by small, silver chains.
But Iggy wasn't paying much attention to the scenery- he was focused on his sister with a concerned look about him. Her red shell sat on the floor next to her dresser, the small gold spikes glimmering in the light. Right now she was wearing a soft, fuzzy outfit made of a light pink. A plain pair of shorts were accompanied by a shirt of the same material. Upon the chest of the shirt was the image of a broken heart with two little angel wings popping out of the sides.
"Uh...So...?" Iggy was too tired to think of what this was about.
"Yea," Wendy muttered, nodding quickly.
"You think it's weird, too, don't you?" she whispered seriously.
Iggy was puzzled a moment, but he could tell by the look in her eye what she was talking to. This was one example of how much a friendship could bond between two siblings.
"I do," he admitted slowly. "I don't get why Dad left so suddenly and such, and why Grandpa is in charge. I mean, usually it's Ludwig who takes the reigns...I think something's up..."
"Something IS up, Igg," Wendy whispered, a little fear in her voice. Iggy stared at her with a frown, curious.
"What do you mean...?" he asked slowly.
Wendy sighed and placed her palm on her forehead for a moment, the short, red-painted claws on the ends of her finger spreading out on her yellow skin.
"I overheard Grandpa talking to some guys earlier and stuff, and..."
"...And what?" Iggy demanded, on the edge of his seat.
"Grandpa lied to us!" Wendy whimpered out quickly.
Iggy paused, his jaw dropped.
"...But Grandpa never lies..." he murmrued in awe.
Wendy nodded hurriedly, and continued.
"I know, I know...OK, I guess he didn't LIE, but...He misled us."
"...How so?" Iggy muttered, keeping his cool.
Wendy clasped her hands together in her lap as she sat cross-legged.
"Well...He said that Daddy went on vacation, right...?"
Her brother simply nodded, his brows furrowed, his jaw ajar.
"Well...What he DIDN'T tell us is that Daddy's not supposed to be coming back..."
Iggy froze, now understanding.
"Whoa...Wait, what makes you so sure?" he demanded calmly, reaching his arms out to console Wendy.
"I-I heard him talk about how he kicked Daddy out, and how he's the King now..." Wendy mumbled, pushing her brother's arms away.
Iggy shook his head in disbelief. This was unlike anything he'd ever dreamed of. His father- KICKED OUT of the castle? Then again, it HAD happened before, hadn't it? No, that was different. Smithy had no relation. But their own GRANDFATHER? Now THAT was a shock.
"Well...I...-" Iggy couldn't find words.
Wendy glared at him frightfully, her teeth grit in worry.
"And you'll never guess who's inside the castle as we speak!" she squealed out.
Iggy shook his head slightly, awaiting the answer.
Wendy took a deep breath before her trembling voice managed to mutter the answer.
"...Grampa's having a meeting with the 'King of Evil'...Ganondorf!!"
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By the way, er...They refer to Kamek as their Grandpa, because Kamek raised Bowser from childhood after his parents were killed, blablabla...I'll save that history lesson for another day. Anyway, although not really related, Kamek is a grandfather figure to the Koopalings. So, what's the deal? Hehe...Read my fic and you'll find out! :P And, ya know, feel free to advertise your story a bit on my topic, too, I certainly don't mind.
Sapphira, keep up the AWESOME work. It's a good story, and I'm dying to read more, OK? (Wait...I'm only on Chapter 13, and...HEY! I CAN read more, huh? Sweet!)
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OK, NOW I've read all of it, and MAN has the style improved! MUCH better, I love it even more than before. I just want to tell you that this fic is really good, and to never give up on it like so many people have with their OWN awesome fics.
Ahem...Um...SO I guess I'll just wait here, then...
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Your World, my World...What''s the difference? There is none. Our worlds are all connected by the same sky...The same Destiny...It''s beginning...A War...But when the time comes, whose side will you be on? And whose side will Fate favor?
Only time will tell...Time is of the essence...Your Quest for Destiny is underway, my friend...But will you find the path that suits you within the chaos of War...?
Edited by - Destiny Smasher on 8/22/2003 9:37:57 AM
