I am speechless...
This is such a well written story! You've done a very good job with the plot, characters' feelings, and moods. It's such a great tragedy ='( It was truly sad to read how Bowser does... well you know... and Peach ends up dying in the end, but it was so well plotted. You have a very wonderful talent for writing a great story. And don't worry, I'm not rushing you on making your next chapter. I know how it feels to have so much homework in the way. X_x
There were many elements besides the tragedy that I liked. There was the romance between Mario and Peach, a pairing that I will always stick to. (There are so many absurd pairing of Peach out there these days.) The romantic emotions from Mario and Peach gave me a nice warm feeling the I can't really describe right now. XD
There was also the fact that Melony didn't know how she came to be or why her mother died.
So keep up the good work! ^_^ And just to tell you, I have been working on a fan-novel about Princess Peach for about a year. The novel talks about Peach's deepest and darkest secret. (Which I won't tell you until you have finished reading some of my novel.) The novel is called Like You've Never Seen Her Before. It is on some sites, but you don't have to worry; it will come to the Fungi Fourms very soon. ^w^ Oh, and by the way, it's still in the works, like you wonderful story The Prophecy.