Right from the start, this story seems allright. Can't quite say it's one of the best, but...Hey, I've read a LOT of Fan Fiction, now, and I'm not expecting anyone on this forum to be a master of writing. Yes, it's good, I'll gladly tell ya that much. Let's see...
Crystal, huh? Hey...The love of my life is named Crystal, too...Too bad she already has a boyfriend and doesn't seem to care about me as much as I do her, bla...Ahem. But if it's meant to be, it's meant to be, so I'll just be patient and...!!!
Oh, sorry! '^_^ Anyway, this stuff is pretty good. Can't quite criticize or compliment, because I read it LAST NIGHT, and don't quite remember anything in particular I was gonna tell ya about the style, etc. Anyway, just don'ty let periods of four years pass and have the Mario Bros. do diddly squat, all right? (poking at Sapphira, :P) Well...
Hm...Hey, I have an idea. Since other people have done it numerous times...Let's see...What do we want...? Action? OK. Here's the last action scene I typed. Just a shameless advertising, persay. Feel free to do it on my fic. Sorry if it offend you, but I've seen a lot of people do it, and nobody gets mad...Soooo...
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"And in this corner," boomed Jim. "We have the Turtle of Treachery, the Vile Reptile, the King of Koopas himself...We have BOOOWWWWSERRRR!!!"
There was a drastic opposition of cheers and boos from the crowd as Bowser gazed at them all, suddenly feeling overcome with adrenaline.
On the opposite side, another platform was on its way up. As it rose, the man on it scratched his mustache lazily. He pinched the brim of his hat and lowered it slightly. And he smiled in a cool and collected fashion. His eyes- those blue jewels- radiated out seriousness and the burning desire to win this one. Mario was not normally like this, but...This was BOWSER, and, after all, he did have a reputation to keep when it came to fighting THIS guy.
"And in this corner we have him..." Larry shouted. "The Mushroom Monster, the Fireflower of Death, the Big Bob-Omb...We have MAAARRRRIIOOOOO!!!"
As Mario's tan boots clopped onto the green floor, he bobbed his head a little, his eyes hidden from hsi hat. The reaction from the audience was an even greater intensity of cheering competition. Even louder cheers than for Bowser, yes- but even louder boo's as well.
Bowser snorted at the red-garbed warrior as Mario crossed his arms over his chest. He slowly raised his head to stare down his 'arch enemy' with a confident smirk. Arch enemy, however, being a VERY bad word for it. Mario and Bowser...could be called enemies, but...They weren't, really. Just..rivals. Bowser wasn't really there to take over the world, he just...liked to stir up trouble. And Mario? Well, Mario liked a challenge. he liked competition. He enjoyed the rivalry. In mario's words: "The best way to know a person is to fight them." And Mario had fought Bowser countless times. He knew. He knew that at heart, Bowser was really a good guy in a messed up world. It was moments like this that Mario lived for. And moments like this that Bowser always looked forward to- only to regret shortly afterward.
"To a good match!" Mario shouted out, his voice cutting through the cheers and cries. His gloved hand was raised, and a thumbs-up was signed.
Bowser returned his smirk and gave his sign back to him. "To a good match!" he growled, sounding a bit unbecoming of himself.
"Three..." said the speakers.
Their eyes locked onto eachother, both sets sparkling on fire.
"Two..."
A drop of sweat ran down the back of Mario's neck, and Bowser swallowed roughly.
"One..."
This was it...They both hunched over slightly, prepared to attack, and...
"GO!"
Both of their bodies sprung into action like rockets as they dashed madly at one another, their eyes still interlocked. It had begun.
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There. Jus' a little appetizer. Wait...I actually didn't write any action into that part. Bah. If you want to see the whole battle...Read it.
Anyway, at least you give Luigi some well-deserved attention. I mean, I've always liked Mario MORE, but Luigi deserves some credit, too, of course. Always overlooked...:(
What happens when the universe is sent outta whack, Bowser is kicked out of his keep, and some of the most powerful and well-known villains of all gaming history combine forces?! A mighty War breaks out, that's what!
Ahem. Errr...Basically what I'm asking, is whether or not you'll read MY fic. Here is a promise I can make to everyone and anyone. If you read my fic and reply on a regular basis, (and let me know you want me to) I will gladly oblige and do the same thing in return as often as I can. ;)
Anyway, let's see what this fic has in store for me next...Shall we?
(MAN, these forums are SOOO SLOOOWWW! Sonic the Hedgehog would be barfing so bad...Anyway, just wanted to let ya know I'm pretty much caught up, and it looks like you're taking Sapphira's approach- but hopefully off in another direction.)
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Your World, my World...What''s the difference? There is none. Our worlds are all connected by the same sky...The same Destiny...It''s beginning...A War...But when the time comes, whose side will you be on? And whose side will Fate favor?
Only time will tell...Time is of the essence...Your Quest for Destiny is underway, my friend...But will you find the path that suits you within the chaos of War...?
Edited by - Destiny Smasher on 8/22/2003 9:40:20 AM